รายละเอียดตัวอย่าง

The charts below illustrate the employment rates of men and women aged 60-64 in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.

18/07/2026 15:47 6.5 คะแนน

หัวข้อ

The charts below illustrate the employment rates of men and women aged 60-64 in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.

จำนวนคำ: 201

แผนภูมิ/กราฟ

แผนภูมิที่อัปโหลด

Essay

The graph depicts the distribution of employed males and females in the 60-64 age group across four countries over a 30-year period spanning from 1970 to 2000. Overall, it is apparent that there was a declining trend in employment for both genders throughout the years. Japan maintained the leading position in terms of employment rates, while Belgium recorded the lowest rate. Notably, a greater proportion of men remained employed than women in all four countries. In 1970, Japan had the highest male employment rate, with 79% of males being employed. Despite falling slightly to 74% in 2000, it still maintained the highest level of male participation. The remaining countries also witnessed a downtrend in male employment, with Belgium experiencing the most dramatic decline, plummeting to 19%. Regarding the employment rate for women in this cohort, Japan was again the leading country, beginning with 43% and declining by 3% in 2000. In contrast, the USA ranked second, with employment rate increasing from 36% to 39% over the period given. The figure for Australia was double that of Belgium in 1970, standing at 16% and 8% respectively. While Australia saw a 2% increase in its female employment rate, Belgium's level remained relatively unchanged.

คะแนนรวม

6.5±0.5

ดีพอใช้

คะแนนเกณฑ์การเขียน

TA6.0
CC7.0
LR7.0
GRA7.0
Task Achievement6.0
เป้าหมาย: 7.0
ข้อผิดพลาด:1
Coherence & Cohesion7.0
เป้าหมาย: 7.0
ข้อผิดพลาด:1
Lexical Resource7.0
เป้าหมาย: 7.0
ข้อผิดพลาด:1
Grammar & Accuracy7.0
เป้าหมาย: 7.0
ข้อผิดพลาด:0

คลิกข้อความที่ไฮไลต์ในเรียงความเพื่อดูคำแนะนำรายละเอียดเพื่อพัฒนา

การวิเคราะห์เชิงลึก

Task 1 - Academic Writing

4 tools available

บทความตัวอย่าง - IELTS Writing Task 1

ยังไม่มีบทความตัวอย่าง

กดปุ่มด้านล่างเพื่อวิเคราะห์และสร้างบทความตัวอย่างคุณภาพสูงสำหรับ Task 1