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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

18/07/2026 16:15 5.5 points

Topic

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Word count: 318

Introduction

Some individuals believe that the successful from pursuading buy-ers to buy things is comes from advertisement while others argued that the popularity of too many advertisements leads to the people's ignorance.

Body

On the one hand, when the company decide to promote their new products or new goods, they usually tend to carry out a campaign to advertise it. For example, Judy doll, is a famous cosmetic company which comes from China, whenever they want to promote their new makeup products, for example lipstick, Judy doll would like to record a wide range of video to introduce their new collection with many unexpected lipstick with fantastic shot of video with difference angles in order to make the clients really interested about the color or the packaging. Finally, Judy doll will post all the video spread to all Tik Tok, Facebook, Instagram and other social media platforms. This will draw girls attention who are want to try somthing new On the other hand, some people are so boring when they scroll in too many advertisements which leads to their ignorance about somewhere new products. For instance, TikTok is a place where users watch funny or entertainment videos but unfortunately they are so many video that are repeat the advertisement, and it way too common, feels absolutely annoying. From my perspective, whenever i still confuse some new makeup products, I just not only watch it introduction from it advertisement because sometime it not the truth about certain thing in that products, but also i will watch the bloggers the influencers, KOL, KOC to get a comprehensive vision

Conclusion

In conclusion, there are still some argument about this tendacy, some says it really helpful from their buying whereas others say it way too common and nobody no longer pay attention to it. From my point of view, i believe that the advertisement will help me to buy the right things i confuse about

Overall Scores

5.5±0.5

Basic

Writing Criteria Scores

TR6.0
CC6.0
LR5.0
GRA5.0
Task Response6.0
Target: 7.0
Errors:3
Coherence & Cohesion6.0
Target: 7.0
Errors:2
Lexical Resource5.0
Target: 7.0
Errors:6
Grammar & Accuracy5.0
Target: 7.0
Errors:8

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