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Many people work long hours,leaving little time for leisure activities.Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

18/07/2026 16:57 6.5 skor

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Many people work long hours,leaving little time for leisure activities.Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

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Introduction

In this day and age,workers have a habit of spending most of their time working and hardly spend time for their leisure activities.Although it can bring some benefits but in think the disadvanatages are greater.

Body

It is clear that working long hours is beneficial.When it comes to salary,people who always work longer than others can earn a large amount of money compensating for their effort and time they invest.Moreover,they can have more opportunities to be promoted to important positions in company.For example in Japan,many people choose to work more to earn more money and enhance their quality of life.In addtion,if they work long hours it can contribute to the growth of country.when employees work more,they are able to strengthen the productivity of companies which can make the country richer and boost the economic growth.

Despite the aforementioned positive aspects, the way staff spend excessive time at work is claimed to exert some detrimental and far-reaching effects on them.One of the effects is health,working for a long time can lead to eye problems as they have to sit in front of computers for a long time and that makes their eyesight weak.Having less time for leisure activities is also dangerous.Employees tend to be more stressed and suffer from long-lasting tiredness although it can help them earn more money.For instance,a survey conducted in London has pointed out that workaholics are usually isolated as they do not want to interact with people.

Conclusion

In conclusion, Although working long hours allows people to earn more money.I think the drawbacks can outweigh the benefits.Instead of focusing on work,people can spend time doing their favourite activities to reduce stress and they need to maintain a work-life balance

Skor Keseluruhan

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TR7.0
CC7.0
LR6.0
GRA6.0
Task Response7.0
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Coherence & Cohesion7.0
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Lexical Resource6.0
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Grammar & Accuracy6.0
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