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Some say the fashion industry is bad for the environment due to constant new products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some say the fashion industry is bad for the environment due to constant new products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

Nowadays, an increasing number of citizens are concerned about the fashion industry. While I agree with the idea of it is bad for the environemt due to constant new products, I do not belive that it brings many benefits to the ecosystem.

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On the one hand, I agree that the fashion sector has many disadvantages to the habitat for two main reasons. Firstly, the argument is the materials to make fashion`s products is the alligator. Crocodile skins are the main materials to produce many handbags. The cost depend on the difficult in catch and the rare. For instance, 70 proportion alligators are killed to collect skin. Therefore, the fashion sector can lead to the extinction of crocodiles. Secondly, another factor is the destruction of the environment. The requirement in the quality of shoes, bags and coats is rise so the number of companies is increasing. The fashion business has a serious impact on the dustruction of forest because humans need to cut down many trees and use a high number of stones to make many companies. As the result, fashion industry should be responsible for the destruction of the ecosystem.

On the other hand, I belive that it has some benefits for the ecosysytem for a couple reasons. The first cause is the fund of protecting the environment. Many fashion factories spend money on the environmental organizations. To illustrate, Dior and Channel are spend 1 million dollars to solve the habitat problems. The second indicator is the campaigns to raise awareness in protect the ecosystem. Green materials are use in the production of clothes. Fashion shows play a key role in creat a campaign help individuals know about the important of environment. As the result, fashion industry has some advantages for the habitat.

Conclusion

In conclusion, although fashion factory has some benefits, I believe that it need to produce less from the animal`s skin.

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