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Many nations focus on raising living standards by prioritizing economic development, but this may lead to the erosion of significant social values. Are the benefits of this economic development greater than the drawbacks? Explain your viewpoint with reasons and include appropriate examples based on your knowledge or experiences.

19/07/2026 11:12 7.0 skor

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Many nations focus on raising living standards by prioritizing economic development, but this may lead to the erosion of significant social values. Are the benefits of this economic development greater than the drawbacks? Explain your viewpoint with reasons and include appropriate examples based on your knowledge or experiences.

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Introduction

The pursuit of economic development as a primary national goal has both benefits and drawbacks. Although material progress comes at an unacceptable cost to social cohesion and traditional values is a real concern, I believe that advantages are greater.

Body

The main disadvantage is that the priority of economic development contributes to eroding community bonds, family structure, and traditional practices that provide meaning and stability to people's life.This erosion often occurs because individuals spend the majority of their time working, which ultimately leads to a lack of emotional connection within both society and the family . For example, in Japan, focusing on the development of the economy to add value to the country, the rate of people who are stressed significantly increases over the years because they lack emotional connection and real happiness in their life. In addition, people disregard traditional festivals and costumes that we need to preserve in the long-term. Consequently, without appropriate work-life balance policies, this relentless focus on economic growth can severely damage societal well-being.

Despite these drawbacks, the benefits are more significant.The primary advantage of prioritising economic development lies in its capacity to generate tax revenues that directly fund tangible public services, such as better infrastructure, healthcare access, and education opportunities, which means funds tangible public services with modern facilities in schools and hospitals that facilitate for people to study better, enhance the quality of life. For example, developed countries like the US have huge economies that contribute to improving the standard of living through advanced transport systems and digital networks . These advantages have a wider and longer-lasting impact than the disadvantages mentioned above.

Conclusion

In conclusion, although the development of economy in many countries may cause the erosion of social values, I believe its advantages outweigh its disadvantages because they enhance the public services and the quality of life

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