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Some people believe that society has been developed by music, which plays a vital role; however, other people think that it is only one of thousands of choices form of entertainment for people. ＋While both views have their own perspective, I lean towards the second one.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people say that music has a crucial role in society. First, music is an assistive tool to maintain culture. Traditional music preserved cultural identity and national heritage. Furthermore, it is also remind younger generations about their ancestor history and tradition. Second, music is one of the inspiration tools. Many songs are encourage people to overcome difficulties, and become more positive by raising awareness of societal issues. Moreover, singers can make a charity concerts to raise money to support people.＋ On the other hand, there are some reasons why some people argue that music is just a normal entertainment platform for people. First, music just supports people to reduce stress and for entertainment. Most people listening to music while working or studying just to relax. As a result, it helps people involve their mood in reduce stress. Second, music may not has an vital effect in the development of society. Listening to music is mainly an individual's hobby. Unlike healthcare or education, music can not make an impact on improving economic development or the environment.＋

＋In conclusion, even though some people argue that music plays a significant position in society, I believe that it is just one of the normal entertainment platforms for humans.