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＋＋It is true that whether college students should utilize their entire time on getting diploma or extend their focus on other subjects. Personally, I think the latter statement is more sound due to reasons given in this essay.

Focusing on only their main subject are disadvantaged when studying in university. Firstly, neglecting some physical subjects make them less active and affect their physical and mental well-being negatively because of the lack of activities which regulates their breath and develops brain functions. As a result, some undergraduates would have worse academic performance and need to spend much more time on their qualification. In addition, some might lack social skills such as personal skill, time management, and so on.＋ This is because most students only focus on their majors in order to get diploma, depriving their valuable time for extracurricular activities, also their friends and families. Consequently, some students would suffer from isolation after finishing their works, leading to autism amongst them.＋On the other hand, studying additional subjects in their college time offers more substantial benefits. From a society perspective, these students could have good relationship with their professors and their college's friends through social activities, thereby having more opportunities in their future career and leading to more choices after graduation.＋ Moreover, taking up different subjects helps undergraduates discorver more about their personality, strenght and weakness. From a pyschological standpoint, students who approach varied subjects would be more confident and secure about their abilities because of understanding their needs well＋

＋In conclusion, college students spending entire time on getting qualification could lead to many drawbacks. I believe that attending other subjects in university is much more benificial