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some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. discuss both views and give your opinion

23/07/2026 09:26 5.5 skor

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some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Introduction

Nowadays, some people think parents should supervise their children closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. And I agree more with the ideal about children should have more freedom.

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On the first hand, supervising their children is the issue of parent now. And they think supervising their children is the activities can do everyday to control them. And this is the most dangerous action because if their parents always supervise or controls, it can make their children do not have more activities they want and do lot of think they want to do. Example, the children of the family want to have the quiet place to study and do not want their parent come to his room and want they can keep silent for him to study better but their parent do not listen to him they always supervise and make lot of noisy in his room and it make him do not focus in his homework it can be affect for his study and quality.On the other hands, if parents make their children freedom and take care of them normally I think they can feel comfortable and have more space to do anything they want. It can make children have more space to create more things they can read book in this quiet room and help they feel relax after study. Example, when their children have finished in his school and want to go home to relax and playing games with his friend and at that time his parents understand that their son have to relax and want to have more quiet place to feel comfortable to decrease stress after school and their child feel they feel their parent understand him and this can help him love their parents more.

Conclusion

Inconclusion, children need more quiet place the feel comfortable and they do not want to supervise from their parent because this can make children become the passive person. And I believe that children should have more freedom to their can create lot of things and they can feel anything comfortable because they do not receive more supervision from their family.

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